Kenpachi Masamune

That's cool. You captured the grumpiness of Squidward very well, though his frown seems to be more wavy then usual. If you exaggerated it more into one of those droopy ...

It kinda drags on and that seems to be its worst enemy. It tells a story, but I am not sure if that is what she was going for. Perhaps ...

It's very good, I like it. Though in the last bit you used the word vibration twice. I shudder with joy as each vibration Rings on forever in my mind ...

Is that the one when the author is writing a story and the character becomes self-aware that someone is controlling him and is life through monologues and narration about him ...

All this trouble for trying to get published? Wow, sometimes it seems easier to just buy the package and promote it yourself. Even if you get published how much money ...

A month or two works fine. Though just make sure you have had distractions or started another piece of work to let your last dwindle out of your mind and ...

Its biological and natural. However I think there is a clear line that can be drawn. That is homosexuality that seats itself into pleasure and convenience rather then actual genetic ...

Soda. Or just use the name. No need to add the 'pop' or sound like some weirdo with 'Fizzy drink'.

Not exactly what I was going for. Just because she essentially whored herself to a guy for two months for a $1000 was a bet, that seems just plain weird. ...

It rhymed and was sort of cute, but the subject was bland and rather boring. It was unoriginal and that made me look at it a little more harshly with ...

When it makes sense I would use it, but I don't think I like to particular torture any of my characters. That is kinda cruel and if you care about ...

Why not start it off with a murder or the captain having a heart attack. The rough seas and the inexperienced 1st mate cannot control the ship through the rocky ...

I am reading Naruto. Previously read the Vampire Hunter D novel, but 395 chapters of Naruto will hold me over for awhile. Currently I am on chapter 33 I think.

1st person is too limited for me. I always stick to 3rd person for stories with more then a single character. The whole I thing is really only good in ...

I don't use swears if its not related to the characters speech or thoughts. Rarely do I get that into a story to make it worthy of putting my own ...